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    [2009: SEP-OCT] Feedback

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    I don't know what happened to the reveiw, but here is a clearer copy, Tal.

    "Good Name for a Shuttle" by Tal Tel-ar

    Feedback by Toni Turner

    I dearly loved this story. The action was great, making me see the predicament the character was in, and feel the pain of losing Kincaide, who he undoubtably cared deeply about, as well as the others who died in the same room. It was heart-wrenching... “He smashed his fist against the bulkhead again and again, screaming his rage into the silent interior. The echoes screamed back.” The “Wow Factor” was there, and continued throughout the story, then came the ending that honestly surprised, and delighted me, leaving me envisioning father and son, wheeling the butts of their guns at the Jem 'Hadar, like a scene straight out of history. The only things I found distracting were the spelling errors, and errors in contractions, like “could’t.” I would have liked to have seen more attention to spell check before it was posted. As far as anything else, I have to say that I was impressed by Tal’s storytelling abilities. Good job, Tal.

    Graduating Class of 238610.15

    in Graduation Hall

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    This is an area for members of this training class to keep in touch with each other.DATES: The class began on October 5, 2009, and ended on October 15, 2009.LIST: sb118-academy3COMMANDING OFFICER: Lt. Commander Rode MitchellFIRST OFFICER: Lt. Commander EskyysCLASS MEMBERS:- Rei Garrett- Joseph Aratin CormalenCongratulations to you all, and welcome to our fleet!

    Graduating Class of 238609.28

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    This is an area for members of this training class to keep in touch with each other.DATES: The class began on September 20, 2009, and ended on September 25, 2009.LIST: sb118-academy1COMMANDING OFFICER: Commander Toni TurnerFIRST OFFICER: Lt. Commander Nimetor AtimenCLASS MEMBERS:- Matt Rathbone- Lydia WolfeCongratulations to you all, and welcome to our fleet!

    Graduating Class of 238609.12

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    This is an area for members of this training class to keep in touch with each other.DATES: The class began on September 7, 2009, and ended on September 12, 2009.LIST: sb118-academy3COMMANDING OFFICER: Lt. Commander Rode MitchellFIRST OFFICER: Lt Cmdr Delinda ShareeCLASS MEMBERS:- Hugh BarnesCongratulations to you all, and welcome to our fleet!

    Graduating Class of 238608.29

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    This is an area for members of this training class to keep in touch with each other.DATES: The class began on August 24, 2009, and ended on August 29, 2009.LIST: sb118-academy1COMMANDING OFFICER: Lt.. Commander SolokFIRST OFFICER: Lt. Commander Andrus JaxxCLASS MEMBERS:- Zania NyxCongratulations to you all, and welcome to our fleet!

    Graduating Class of 238608.14

    in Graduation Hall

    Posted · Edited by Toni

    This is an area for members of this training class to keep in touch with each other.

    DATES: The class began on August 10, 2009, and ended on August 15, 2009.

    LIST: sb118-academy3

    COMMANDING OFFICER: Commander Toni Turner

    FIRST OFFICER: Lt. Commander Rode Mitchell

    CLASS MEMBERS:

    - Aislinn O'Hanlon

    Congratulations to you all, and welcome to our fleet!

    Graduating Class of 238607.31

    in Graduation Hall

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    This is an area for members of this training class to keep in touch with each other.DATES: The class began on July 27, 2009, and ended on July 30, 2009.LIST: sb118-academy1COMMANDING OFFICER: Lt. Commander Jhen ThelevFIRST OFFICER: Lt. Commander Lance FirestarterCLASS MEMBERS:- Arden RizaCongratulations to you all, and welcome to our fleet!

    Graduating Class of 238607.18

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    This is an area for members of this training class to keep in touch with each other.DATES: The class began on July 13, 2009, and ended on July 18, 2009.LIST: sb118-academy3COMMANDING OFFICER: Lt. Commander Lance FirestarterFIRST OFFICER: Lt. Commander SolokCLASS MEMBERS:- T'ReshikCongratulations to you all, and welcome to our fleet!

    Graduating Class of 238607.05

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    This is an area for members of this training class to keep in touch with each other.DATES: The class began on June 29, 2009, and ended on July 5, 2009.LIST: sb118-academy1COMMANDING OFFICER: Commander Toni TurnerFIRST OFFICER: Lt. Commander Rode MitchellCLASS MEMBERS:- K'jharr- Freya Andersen- James Archer CanisCongratulations to you all, and welcome to our fleet!

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