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Ryan Horn

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  1. Just re-raising the question....Feedback? Looks like we are 2 months behind....
  2. "I want a STORY!" The shrill cry of his son cut through the elder Ferengi's ears like a spike driven into his skull. "Fine. Just lie down and be quiet." He bent down, reaching over to the table near the bed for the worn book lying there. "NO! Not the rules of acquisition again. I want something NEW!!!" The elder Ferengi glowered at the younger lying in the bed. His words came across with the tone parents have learned to use through the ages, and children have learned to their dismay. "You'll learn these rules, and know them. When I was a young Ferengi, that's all I ever wanted to know
  3. Sooo...before the judges go through another round...any news on when the reviews from last round are coming?
  4. Any word on the reviews? (Saw it's been 8 days...) Thanks..
  5. Any idea on when we are going to get the reviews? Win or lose..I wanna see what people thought..
  6. I think she was referring to your posting of the story..
  7. Lt. Matthew Ray struggled to consciousness. The dim light of cabin pierced his weary eyes as he slowly sat up. Far too few lights greeted him from the runabout's console, a sign that the situation had gotten worse as he slept. He got up, half-heartedly tapping several consoles, unsurprised at their lack of response. He picked up the PADD from the floor before sitting back down on the makeshift bed. "Stardate...unknown. This is Lieutenant Matthew Ray, formerly of the USS Trantor. The Trantor was destroyed in the same event that trapped me here. A Romulan Warbird decloaked off the Starb
  8. I'll be turning in something on this. Like Mr. Wilde I was initially tempted to have something related to the starship... However, I've got a different kind of "Revolution" in mind for mine.. Good luck all!
  9. Hey Cara, If cuz of exams... good luck! But...using the previous "What if" as an example... Some people had Warp flight working until yesterday...some had warpflight never existing... sooo depending on how you want to approach it would determine what you wanted to write about.
  10. Congrats Nemitor! And thanks...*grin* just waiting for the judges reviews...
  11. Good luck everyone! Some really great stories out there, I don't envy our judges..
  12. A single starship cleaved through the depths of space, its destination unknown. The darkness within matched by that found without, the few active flickering lights providing no more light to the ship’s interior than the stars it passed through lit the exterior. A single console remained open, repeating a message over and over again. The computer, overloaded far past it’s capacity, fragmenting the message as it was sent out. “NCC ….. Mariner...ng….ship…..distress” Then suddenly, without any apparent reason, the message stopped. ***** “Capta
  13. Good Luck Julia, I'm in the same boat. I've got the concept, plot, storyline all in my head..but my first attempt was awful enough that I s[...]ped it and started watching a movie instead...*laugh*
  14. Um...where are you getting this from the feedback he gave? Here's what I saw... Um...Seems to be a positive first paragraph.... And this is a comment made to all..not just you. And I'd like to add this point... you came in as a runner up! So why the "So much for writing challenges" tagline? And the attitude? *laugh* I've won ONCE...and then the Judges comments were that my story was the most fitting the requirements...NOT the best story. We aren't getting paid for this...and neither are the judges. Our ONLY pay is the feedback they give so we can improve our writing...or bask in adula
  15. I agree with Cody on this one. And while I also understand where Rocar is going with this...his suggestions seemed to me a "cheat". Not actively going after the point. Which is why I brought this up. Single/simple concepts such as deception/love/etc...are very easy to interpret...just wasn't sure where this theme was going. But...I can go with this.. (No idea WHERE I'm going..but that's usually how I start out..*chuckle*)
  16. That does make a lot more sense. However....as an example, if someone was to write the storyline for the 'City story and submit it...wouldn't the judges say that while its a great, powerful, moving story...the "City on the Edge of Forever" concept is just kinda attached on loosely? I guess that part is what I'm having difficulty with. I'm trying to come up with something that would work with the concept...but the base story doesn't appear to... Soooo...should our stories relate to the storyline? Are the judges going to be more forgiving of the connection to the title as the original was w
  17. Hi all, As always...thanks to the judges for reading/reviewing. I may not always agree...but an impartial review is always worthwhile. By the way...does anyone know why that episode was called "City on the edge of forever?" I dunno...especially after some reviews on stories written here...the title seems fairly unrelated to the story.
  18. Congrats Mr. Cody.. Way to go everyone else...wonderful stories! -Walker
  19. Sorry, the first post was my draft copy, wasn't intended as my final post. Here's the final. ---------- A low sobbing echoed through the vastness. The Captain sighed as she went through the records another time. Of all the tasks she had to do, this remained the hardest. Explaining to families how their children had died. As she wrote each one she could imagine the shaking hands as they opened the sealed envelope, one of the few times they would ever receive a paper document. Their eyes tearing as they read the note then reread it a dozen times hoping to find some error, some flaw. Anyth
  20. Whew..got it in under the wire. Not my best I'm sure..but.. here goes..
  21. A low sobbing echoed through the room. The Captain sighed as she went through the records another time. Of all the tasks she had to do, this remained the hardest. Explaining to families how their children had died. As she wrote each one she could imagine the shaking hands as they opened the sealed envelope, one of the few times they would ever receive a paper document. Their eyes tearing as they read the note then reread it a dozen times hoping to find some error, some flaw. Anything to prove it wasn’t their child, their loved one. Then, the cursing would start. Of Starfleet, of the Fed
  22. I'm not a fan of your respective stories..I must find a way to destroy them..destroy them all..leaving only my stories to lead...to win! Of course if I lose at that point it'll be embarrassing.. Seriously, it is always great seeing the directions everyone takes their stories. I'm always impressed at how different the stories tend to be...especially with the same kernel of inspiration to start. (And not slightly worried as I try to determine a story that will stand out amongst that august body) Now...I just gotta figure out a way...
  23. Hey all, First of all, thank you for the review. Good/Bad/Ugly...it all comes down to a set of opinions... and my story is worthless if no one reads it. And even a poor review means that it's made an impact. (And yes..I repeat that every time I get upsetting or frustrating reviews...*chuckle*) I do very much appreciate the time all the judges take...and any responses I get from additional questions I ask after the reviews.. that said...(To quote from the review itself..*smile*) Actually..I was going for a dual message in the story. Allison was the "window" that everyone else in the unive
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